Analysis. Harvard MBA Essay.
Example 1. Harvard MBA Essay. Featured in the HARBUS Essay Guide.
Example 2. Harvard MBA Essay.

Below you’ll find two examples of Harvard’s essay for the 2018-2019 full-time MBA admissions season. You’ll find additional essay examples and essay topic analyses for leading MBA programs at the preceding link.


Harvard Business School’s lone MBA essay is an opportunity for candidates to give the admissions committee a sense of their experiences, personality, and ultimately, likability.

HBS has a reputation for producing a disproportionate number of fortune 500 CEOs compared to other business schools. While the popular perception is that business schools like HBS develop leaders, the reality is that they build their MBA class by culling candidates with great leadership experience and potential.

The onus is on the applicant to exude MBA-level polish through their written application and especially in interview.

There are lots of different leadership styles but HBS gives preference to candidates who fall into the ‘visionary leader’ category. Visionary Leaders tend to excel at articulating top-level strategy. Their strong suit is rallying others and convincing them of where the organization needs to to. Successful applicants to the HBS MBA Class of 2019 will be strong orators and great strategic thinkers.

We teach people the courage to act under uncertainty. We’re asking people how to learn to take a stand. – HBS Video: Inside the HBS Case Method

MBA candidates with the Visionary leadership style could be described as: inspiring, and able to move people toward a common goal. Visionary leaders tell their teams where they’re going, but not how they’re going to get there – they leave it up to team members to find their way to the common goal. Empathy is the most important aspect of Visionary leadership. But the empathy referred to here isn’t empathy in the ‘poor you’ sense of the term. It isn’t about being able to relate to people so well that you understand what they are thinking and feeling so that you can shepherd them in a certain direction.

Analysis. Harvard MBA Essay.

As we review your application, what more would you like us to know as we consider your candidacy for the Harvard Business School MBA program?

What the HBS essay isn’t

  • It isn’t an opportunity to enumerate every one of your academic and professional achievements to date. That’s not storytelling, that’s throwing spaghetti at a wall and hoping that some of it sticks (in your reader’s mind).
  • It isn’t an opportunity to dedicate 700+ words to your post-MBA goals and why you really need a MBA from HBS. It’s ok to include that information in the essay, but it shouldn’t constitute the essay’s central theme.

In short, while highlighting a particular achievement or describing your career goals is permissible, the essay should be a story about you, not a list of things you’ve done. So if some of achievements or goals do figure in your essay’s final draft they should be there to support the broader story. If your essay were a house, those elements would be the paint and siding – not the structure’s wood frame.

What more would you like us to know?

HBS asks ‘What more would you like us to know…?‘. More being the operative term, given that your candidacy and your academic, community and professional accomplishments are already summed up in what I call ‘the facts’: your resume, recommendations, online application and short answers. The facts are the immutable part of your story. If you are an investment banker you can’t very well present yourself as not an investment banker – right? Right. That’s ok because the facts aren’t the key to a great HBS essay.

The facts live outside of us but great essays are born inside of us – within, what I call, ‘not the facts’ which are our subjective personal experiences. At the beginning of their MBA journey, candidates don’t yet realize this. Clients will often say something like, ‘‘I’m an investment banker – how can you help me differentiate myself?‘ ‘I’m an Indian guy in IT and it’s a very competitive applicant pool – what can I do to stand out?‘. Notice how these concerns center on the external characteristics they have in common with other applicants? But when an essay centers on external characteristics or achievements, a candidate doesn’t differentiate himself, instead he actually makes himself easily comparable to others. Why would you put yourself in that position? Here’s an example:

An investment banker uses ‘the facts’ to write his essay. He talks about what an exceptional employee he’s been – he received accolades from several clients and was promoted six months ahead of schedule. He joined the corporate employee committee and spearheaded a campaign for free snacks…etc. The problem with ‘the facts’ is that it leaves him trying to stand out as an investment banker rather than as a person. Another investment banker will easily ‘one up’ him by writing her essay about being promoted a whole year ahead of schedule and spearheading a campaign for free lunch (not just snacks).

My job is to get that investment banker to tell a unique story that is already inside of him. That will differentiate him because they’ll be absolutely nobody who could tell his exact story, in exactly the same way and therefore there is nobody for the adcom to compare him with ‘apples to apples’.

Here are just a few of the approaches Ive used in the past to write ‘not the facts‘ essays for my clients:

  • Used my client’s old journal entries as a backdrop for a reflection on inequality and intercultural differences
  • Leveraged a unifying theme from my client’s childhood right on through to their present day job (such as entrepreneurship that ran in the family or a life-long interest in mechanical engineering) to weave a unique story of who they are and what they hope to do in and for the world
  • Wrote an essay centered on the values and lessons my client had learned from pivotal people and mentors throughout her life to create an expose on the why behind the choices they’ve made and hope to make

Maybe you’re wondering, how will I know if my essay focuses on ‘not the facts‘? Ask yourself this question: ‘Would my reader have been able to reasonably guess at the topic of my essay after reading through the rest of my written application? If the answer is no, then you’re on the right track.

The factsincludes your resume, recommendations, online application and short answers.’Not the facts could include (but is not limited to) a characteristic or attribute that has woven its way throughout your life, inflection points in your life or career, an anecdote, philosophy or core values.

  • A characteristic or attribute that has woven its way throughout your life | Before you show your reader not only how that characteristic or attribute has impacted your personal and professional lives you’ll want to give ample discussion to where that characteristic or attribute originated from. To illustrate that you can think about The Giving Pledge that Bill Gates created. The Giving Pledge is a commitment to give the majority of your net worth to philanthropy, either during your lifetime or upon your death. The Pledge is a moral commitment, not a legal contract. What is much more intriguing than all of the good that Bill Gates has created through his pledge (via the Gates Foundation) is what gave him the idea to create the Giving Pledge in the first place. I’m sure there’s an amazing backstory there!
  • Inflection pointsYou may want to think about some important or pivotal moments in your life and consider how they have shaped the person you are today. Identify the factors/people/events/traits that most shaped your personal and professional course and/or worldview. Now think about any downstream implications in other areas of your life? Don’t worry if the inflection points you identify aren’t chronologically or logically connected to one another – what’s interesting about inflection points is that they reveal your underlying values.
  • Singular anecdote, Philosophy, Core Values | Anecdotes can be leveraged as a way of revealing your core values or reflecting on a topic that is relevant to your personal or professional journey. My favorite essays usually have an anecdote (no matter the length). Anecdotes are powerful because they create an immediate, human connection with the reader.

A ‘not the facts’ essay always conveys something relatable about who a candidate was, is or would like to be.  Relatable essays allow you to connect with your reader on a personal level. They transform a candidate from a two-dimensional object into a three-dimensional human being – one that another human being on the adcom will remember, and even like!

Because people feel more comfortable helping those who they know and like, this gives clients a distinct advantage. When someone gets done reading your essay (or listening to your speech) you don’t want them to think you’re a Master of the Universe, you want them to think ‘Mark/Melissa seems like a really neat person. I should grab a coffee with him/her and talk about my start-up idea/career goals/their experience at Bain etc.

We’re looking for a story. A story only you can tell.

My advice is to tell a genuine story about yourself that, in passing, relates some of your accomplishments, but primarily gives the listener insight into who you are on a deeper level: your worldview, how you handle adversity, your values etc. Any story can be a compelling one if executed correctly and the HBS adcom will judge you on the execution of this essay/speech just as your classmates will judge you on your ability to articulate ideas out loud in class. As a future business leader (en germe, for now) your employees will look to these same skills when deciding whether to follow you or not.

Example 1. Harvard MBA Essay.

As we review your application, what more would you like us to know as we consider your candidacy for the Harvard Business School MBA program

This essay helped my client secure an admit to Harvard Business School after having been dinged without interview by a number of top business schools the year before (during which time he had penned his own essays). This essay is currently one of twenty-nine essays from the HBS class of 2019 featured in the HARBUS MBA Essay Guide ($60) and is also cited in the Poets & Quants article 29 Essays That Got Applicants into Harvard Business School.

The essay is strong because it:

  1. Focuses on backstory and granular details to draw readers inAnecdotally, as a high school senior I naively submitted just one college application; singling out X University largely because there was no application fee. | When I began touching my heart after every conversation as a sign of respect, people’s eyes would brighten in recognition.
  2. Demonstrates a mature, big picture understanding of oneself and the wider worldI’ve often struggled to imagine them as twenty-something Associates – still wet behind the gills. Yet, like everyone else, that’s exactly where they began their careers. At twenty-seven, I sometimes think that my long-term goal, seems like a lofty one, but in those moments I remind (and reassure) myself that good business leaders aren’t born, but rather developed.
  3. Contains airtight logic and sentence structureFor me, that development process is a three-fold one and involves cultivating knowledge, experience and good judgment. I’ve grown in practical experience through steady career progression… I’ve sought out and gleaned knowledge through the mentorship of seasoned professionals… The HBS case method appeals to me as a new way to experiment with business problems and hone good judgment because…


I’ve grown in practical experience through steady career progression at Company and progressive responsibility for larger projects, teams and deliverables. I’ve sought out and gleaned knowledge through the mentorship of seasoned professionals like Henry X, a President at Company, who has generously shared lessons and insights from his own career. The HBS case method appeals to me as a new way to experiment with business problems and hone good judgment because it represents a unique learning platform that exists between first-hand experience and imparted knowledge. In addition, the possibility to grow personally and contribute to the growth of others at HBS is made possible by the nature of the HBS student body, with its wealth of different industry and functional perspectives.

While my professional experience has been critical, my personal experiences have been equally influential in shaping my vision of what good leadership and management mean. After immigrating to the US from Vietnam, my father spent the remainder of his working life as a short-order cook, while my mother became a seamstress. Our family budget was always tight, but the situation was exacerbated when, my father’s employer went bankrupt and my father was laid off after twelve years of service. ‘Name, truth is I fifty-two years old, can’t read and English not so good’. He never found work again. Directly assisting the General Managers of Company’s Interiors Division, I’ve gained initial exposure to P&L management. That’s led me to wonder whether the bankruptcy might not have been avoided through better leadership, managerial foresight or administration. Businesses are at the heart of any free-market economy, but they’re likewise an integral part of the social fabric. While they benefit shareholders and clients, they also exist as institutions from which individuals and their families derive a livelihood. That’s been top of mind for me when on location in Bandung, Indonesia, and, most recently, Colorado Springs where I’ve worked under pressure to turn around plants struggling to meet their business objectives.

‘The cleats are $50 and the uniform’s another $90’ Mom told Dad in Vietnamese. ‘And the next thing you know he’ll break his arm and that’s $400 at the emergency room.’

What my sister and I went without weren’t so much the petty indulgences, like soccer, as the tacit and explicit guidance parents usually provide: helping their children navigate societal norms and envisage an educational path and professional career beyond high school. Anecdotally, as a high school senior I naively submitted just one college application; singling out X University largely because there was no application fee.

Because of my family situation, I believe that determination and self-reliance were qualities that I developed at an early age. At the time, they were coping mechanisms, but today, I see them as characteristic of my approach to challenges. At Company I’ve often found myself in unchartered territory, be that culturally, on-location at plants in Indonesia and India, or be that functionally, performing financial and operational valuations on acquisition targets. Over time I’ve come to know myself better and have developed a strong inner sense of what I can achieve. I think that type of self-knowledge is pivotal to leading others as well. In order to fully understand the challenges team members face in their work, managers and leaders at operationally focused organizations like Company must be adept at building relationships on an inter-personal level and communicating on a technical one.

‘Any questions?’ I asked, wrapping up my first meeting with staff – all of whom were Indonesian. ‘Yes, when you leave?’ asked Widiyanto in a tone that made me question whether the meeting had really gone as well as I thought.

One example of relationship building took place when I was in my 3rd rotation of Company’s Operations Leadership Program in Bandung, Indonesia. Under the plant’s previous owner, Another Company, managers weren’t expected to scrutinize metrics unless there was a blatant issue. Many people felt frustrated with the new Company approach, which required them to record and analyze everything. My goal was to help the Bandung staff make the transition by taking reporting off their plates and handling it myself.

Indonesia is a very hierarchical society, and gossip and suspicion were rife in the plant. ‘You are taking over reporting for firing us.’ I was emphatic, ‘No. We’re increasing production not reducing it. I’m trying to help you and the whole plant.’

My stance of ‘just wanting to help’ was seen as mere lip service because it deviated from the Indonesian way of thinking. If my behavior were more culturally relatable to the staff, I thought I’d be more successful in sharing my ideas with them.

When I began touching my heart after every conversation as a sign of respect, people’s eyes would brighten in recognition. I began greeting colleagues in Indonesian, wore a traditional Indonesian shirt on Fridays and, admittedly, resorted to a ‘ploy’ – showing up to an all hands meeting with pisang goreng (a.k.a. banana fritters). Relations improved, and staff began sharing the data I’d been requesting. The same employees, who were at first reticent, ultimately played a huge role in carrying out our expansion plans and helping with logistics.

Months later, we were on the cusp of expanding our manufacturing by fifty percent. I’d also managed to put staff at ease with capturing reporting data and discussing it with colleagues in the U.S. Reaching those milestones had to do with many smaller successes along the way. Chief among them was an ability to face communication and leadership challenges and work through them.

Before heading back to the States, Widiyanto asked me again, ‘Hey, when you leave?’ but this time it was in order to plan a going away tea for me at the plant. That felt great.

In this essay I hope to have provided you with insight into where I’ve come from, where I’d like to go and my personal understanding of leadership. In closing I’d like to thank you for your time in reviewing my application for the HBS Class of 2019.

Example 2. Harvard MBA Essay.

They say laughter is the best medicine! This MBA candidate built a successful nonprofit that delivers improvisational comedy to the sick and the elderly. He uses the HBS essay to give the adcom insight into how his interests and entrepreneurial spirit connect his career trajectory to date (nonprofit and finance) with his short-term goal to work in a capacity-building role at a larger-scale nonprofit like the Clinton Foundation.


They were laughing at the comedic charity event. Oh let’s not be modest – the crowd was in hysterics! Performer’s line: ‘I opened my eyes and all I could see were…’ Resident of NURSING HOME chimes in: ‘Goats!’ By then, the NONPROFIT’s improv troop had already recruited two audience members to the stage. In turn, each would fill in a word of dialogue when tapped on the shoulder.

While I had spent my classroom time at UNIVERSITY majoring in philosophy, outside of the classroom, I was involved with improvisational comedy both on and off campus. With my undergraduate degree in hand, I decided to pursue a postbaccalaureate program in life sciences at IVY LEAGUE UNIVERSITY. While there, I founded a nonprofit that allowed me to combine my passion for people’s physical and mental wellbeing with my love for improvisational theater. NONPROFIT delivers free comedy performances and workshops at elder care, physical therapy and substance abuse recovery centers. By the end of our second year the organization boasted a nominal presence in CITY.

For the first time I felt that I was in the right place. Professionally, being the founder of NONPROFIT allowed me to combine my talents and interests while leading the organization allowed me to move outside the ivy tower into the world of social entrepreneurship. However, by YEAR, I realized that I lacked some of the skills and savoir faire necessary to grow the organization beyond CITY. Later that year I found myself at a crossroads: I was on the verge of completing my postbaccalaureate program and reflected seriously on what direction my career should take. Typically graduates’ enroll in medical school or a doctoral program, but after working in several university departments, I had the wherewithal to recognize that I didn’t have a calling to either the medicine or academia. Instead I accepted an Associate role with X Financial Group, a financial services consulting firm in the regulatory and risk management space.

I saw parallels between NONPROFIT and X Financial Group in that both organizations demanded an entrepreneurial mindset. As an Analyst Consultant at Promontory I found myself in an unfamiliar setting and a high pressure work environment. I reached out to colleagues and my supervisor for guidance in order to ramp up my finance skills and to understand the technical models and the company’s procedures.

In YEAR, I returned to NONPROFIT as the full-time Director. To date, I’ve successfully lead expansions to CITY X, CITY Y, and CITY Z, significantly increased our volunteer base, strengthened our brand awareness through marketing and social media, and built out our fundraising apparatus. I am proud of the accomplishments I’ve achieved working alongside NONPROFIT’s talented team of volunteers but I continue to face professional challenges in areas such as capital generation and organizational funds management.

My short-term post-MBA goal is to work at a nonprofit like Community Wealth Partners or the Clinton Foundation, were I would secure a role that allows me to focus on capacity-building and further develop my skills in nonprofit finance and management. In the long-term I hope to advance in seniority within the non-profit sector and would dedicate my personal time to NONPROFIT – continuing on as Director and further scaling the organization across the U.S.

The formal management education and practical experiences of an MBA program are a necessary next step in my career trajectory. An MBA will provide with the fundamental business and finance knowledge, along with practical management skills that I lack. In turn, my business education would accelerate the career in social sector management that I envision for myself.

During my visit to the HBS campus this fall I felt more strongly than ever that HBS would fulfill my need for theoretical instruction, lively discussion and hands-on application of business case studies. Professor T’s course, on Entrepreneurship in the Social Sector, and Professor J’s course, on Social Marketing, are just two of the many offerings at Harvard Business School that would complement the core curriculum and prepare me to apply my classroom learning in the business world. Being located near Boston, while still on a campus that promotes student bonding and personal growth as much as it does academic growth would be ideal. As a skier and hiker, weekend outings with classmates, would be high on my list of leisure activities.

I’ve learned through NONPROFIT that creative modalities such as humor and improvisational comedy can help improve health and well-being in communities if supported with good business decision making and a solid financial planning. When the staff at a care facility thank my team at NONPROFIT for bringing comic relief to people who are suffering, I am truly humbled and amazed to reflect on how an idea, supplemented by a strategic vision and hard work, can leave its mark in the world. As an alumnus of HBS I would hope to continue to create impact on a greater scale within the not for profit world.

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